seemed more like a fun little thing
you guys didn't seem like you were really feeling the music or the lyrics. it seemed like you guys wrote some lyrics and were just reading them off to the beat. i know that's what performing a song is, but you still have to have that energy in you. that's what a good performance is: making music come alive. also, the end just sounded like you guys were messing around and not really serious about the song. i'm not saying it's a bad thing, but it kind of just seemed like you guys don't want to be taken seriously. the mic quality made it hard to hear the words and the music. so yeah, like you said, the audio quality could be improved.
i think if you guys re-did this, it could be a lot better sounding. it doesn't seem bad, but the way it was delivered could be improved a lot. good luck with it.